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Post by Chris_Valentine on Mar 20, 2002 11:05:09 GMT -5
Really? *happy dance* I had hoped it'd turn out alright. I'm just glad so many of you like it.
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Post by Marcus_Flint on Mar 20, 2002 22:02:33 GMT -5
I thought we were friends....
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Post by Missy_Brown on Mar 20, 2002 22:45:58 GMT -5
[shadow=red,left,300]aww dont worry Lex. you will show up soon...just like me! ;D hehe...[/shadow]
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Post by Chris_Valentine on Mar 20, 2002 22:52:02 GMT -5
*sighs* Of course we're friends! I've been planning on putting you in. It just takes time. I haven't met all the cool Slyths yet. Hm... but what will your name be? *thinks* Do you wanna be Lex or do you have a name I could use?
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fico the fur
Hufflepuff Alumni
Why'd you say "halleluia" if it means nothin' to ya'?
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Post by fico the fur on Mar 21, 2002 3:04:17 GMT -5
Okay, *dons Newsies cap, which signifies her editorial mode*, first off: I'm liking it; (in a cross between Bogart and an Englishman) in fact, I'm liking it a lot. *stops the role-play* Yeah, it's really good. I like how you're incorporating everyone in seperately. And how Chris is all cute and self-pitying in a non-annoying way. And how you can see all the different aspecs of Chris' character. Very good. Constructive critism junk: (if you hate when I do this, just smack me and tell me to stop) I didn't really notice anything much except for some spelling/punctuation mistakes, but you said you typed these during class and were rushed, so they are easily forgiven. ;D The only other thing I noticed was this certain pet peeve of mine. I hate when people use one word twice in the same sentence or in sentences right next to each other, or something like that. If you did that on purpose, smack me again. So: pg 1, post 1, "a group of boys were gathered in a group", I just noticed the word "group" that time. pg 2, when Chris and Leia meet and are sneaking in to get Nialle: "inside. . .inside. . .inside" (The actual quote was long, and I am lazy. So, yeah, that's all I thought. I love the story, and I wanna hear more as soon as you get a chance.
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Post by Chris_Valentine on Mar 21, 2002 7:56:36 GMT -5
Critism is good. I forget about little things like punctuation when I'm in class. I tend to try to pay attention to the teacher and the story, it just never works. I'll try to work out some of the little flaws n my writting. So things will be fixed.
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Post by Marcus_Flint on Mar 21, 2002 7:56:59 GMT -5
You can use Erik... *sighs* Of course we're friends! I've been planning on putting you in. It just takes time. I haven't met all the cool Slyths yet. Hm... but what will your name be? *thinks* Do you wanna be Lex or do you have a name I could use?
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Post by Chris_Valentine on Mar 21, 2002 18:36:56 GMT -5
Ooh Erik! Alright Erik, I'll meet you in the slyth common room or at the table. Whenever I can get away from Draco after the sorting ceremony.
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Post by Leia Skye on Mar 21, 2002 20:07:36 GMT -5
Leia leia leia, what am I gonna do with you? Hm.. I dunno what would you do? [glow=pink,2,300]...do you really want me to answer either of those questions? [/glow]
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Post by Chris_Valentine on Mar 22, 2002 7:58:18 GMT -5
Hm.. I'm guessing I should say no. So... yes!
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Post by Leia Skye on Mar 23, 2002 11:38:14 GMT -5
[glow=pink,2,300]*rolls eyes at chris* just write some more, ok? ;D just think of what you would do to a tied-up nialle... [/glow]
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Post by Jet Black on Mar 25, 2002 5:13:57 GMT -5
Please continue ASAP! This stuff is GREAT!! ;D
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Post by coldmercurywitch on Mar 25, 2002 7:56:07 GMT -5
Yeah Chris, this story is so cool...and you still have to put me in it. ;D
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Post by Chris_Valentine on Mar 25, 2002 8:03:18 GMT -5
I will put y'all in it ASAP. I just need to get my butt moving.
*looks at Leia* Pet bunny?
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Post by Chris_Valentine on Mar 25, 2002 12:53:07 GMT -5
It's been so long since i actually wrote anything in here so, I'm just gonna fastforward a little through the sorting ceremony. I believe we all know what houses we're in.
The ceremony was quick and painless. One by one students were called up to the hat alphabetically and one by one they were sorted into their seperate houses. By the time Chris' name was called no one was really paying attention. All eyes were upon a single Gryffindor, Harry Potter. Chris sighed as the hat was lowered upon his head. He stared for a moment at 'The Boy Who Lived', already both interested and bored with him. He both loathed and loved Potter the moment he saw him. Chris was glad that someone had defeated the Dark Lord, but at the same time he hated Potter for doing it. "It is my destiny to destroy you..." he whispered as the brim of the hat fell over his eyes.
"Hm... interesting, very interesting." the hat began as it searched his thoughts, "A very peculiar one indeed. Where shall I place you? Much too kind for Slytherin, but yet that ambition is there. Well I can't put you anywhere near young mister potter with that attitude. Hm...hufflepuff perhaps? No, that'll never work. Ravenclaw maybe?"
"Slytherin, please.." chris whispered to the hat.
"Slytherin?! But, you'll never fit in....oh my. i had one exactly like you before. Who are you following? Who are you trying to change? Do you even know that...alright then, if that is your wish I shall place you in SLYTHERIN!!"
Chris smiled at the hat and joined his fellow slytherins who sat at their tables and cheered. He froze midstride as he heard McGonangal call out the next name.
"Luna Valentine!"
"Luna Valentine?" he whispered to himself. he hardly noticed the other Slytherin come and lead him to a seat. "What's wrong with you?" the boy asked, "You act like you didn't know your sister was here." Chris stared at him blankly and shook his head. "N-no, she's not my sister. I live with Pansy and her parents." he explained. The boy thought about this for a moment. "Sorry about that dude. I heard the last name and just assumed the two of you were related. Oh, My name's Erik." he said as he extended his hand. "Chris Valentine." Chris replied as he shook Erik's hand.
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